Sonicmario

So... I'm re-writing chapter nine of PIT. Don't get me wrong, I don't hate it. I've just been doing a lot of contemplating lately and I just don't think it fits the story. Applying what I've learned from my writing class, it has a bad case of telling without showing. It reads like an essay on Edna's character rather than having her develop it through action. Speaking of which, the whole thing is anticlimactic. What I was trying to do was have a moment where Edna and Lilli just sit and talk about their problems after all the crap they went through... but I realize now that that isn't interesting. When one thinks 'Edna and Harvey' the last thi